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Que-In recent years more and more people are choosing to read E books rather than paper books.Do advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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Now a days it
is often believe
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is often believed
 by many people reading by E-books
is
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are
 very convenient with respect to
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paper book
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paper books
.In my opinion merits
supecede
take the place or move into the position of
supersede
surpassed
 the demerits.
Firstly
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, In recent times people are very much encouraging the use of technology which are easy to use and
off
connects a noun with the preceding word
of
 course user friendly, same as in term of E-books are
ecofriendly
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 and required
minumum
the least possible
minimum
 space. Thousands of books
can be accommodate
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can accommodate
 within a small
pendrive
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,
In contrast
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 same amount of books required large space to
placed
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place
 the
paper
Use synonyms
 books.E-books does not hamper the environment because no trees are
cuts
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cut
 to make the E-
books whereas
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books, whereas
 lots of trees are
cutting
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cut
 due to
manufacturing
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the manufacturing
 of
paper
Use synonyms
 books
,
Accept space
,
the results of
this
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 cause
envionment
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environmental
environment
 pollution in many ways
for instance
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 land
errosion
(geology) the mechanical process of wearing or grinding something down (as by particles washing over it)
erosion
 and air pollution.
Secondly
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, In fractions of
seconds we
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seconds, we
 can downloads as many books as we want
,
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,
as and when we order
paper
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 books online it
take
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takes
lot
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a lot
 of time to
deliverd
bring to a destination, make a delivery
deliver
 and there is lots of chances of damaging of
paper
Use synonyms
 books during transportation
.
Accept space
.
E-books we can carry easily with us during our daily routine and our daily
trasportation
a facility consisting of the means and equipment necessary for the movement of passengers or goods
transportation
 where as
paper
Use synonyms
 books are very difficult to manage.
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moreover
in addition
Moreover
, I found that reading longer time of E-books can cause eye strain due to computers, tablets and mobiles screen as compared to
paper
Use synonyms
 books, but
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
also
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 found that it is
negeligible
so small as to be meaningless; insignificant
negligible
 because protective glasses and screens are available in the market by which radiation from the screen become
negilible
so small as to be meaningless; insignificant
negligible
. To conclude, in
morden
belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages
modern
Modern
 era reading by E-books are very much
compfortable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
then
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 to
paper
Use synonyms
 books, but we have
assure
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assured
 that we read it by using protective screens.
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