13. Many museums charge for admission, while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admissions to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

Some museums have an entrance fee while some of those do not have any fee to enter. I completely agree that it is advantageous to charge admission fees than the disadvantage. Explanation of the opinion will be discussed in the upcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, every institution requires revenue to run on it. For
maintenance
and to pay salaries to employees serving in the museum definitely needs a source of income.
For example
, there are few heritage museums in cities of India, which are left alone without operating, due to the free of charge admissions to the visitors, it becomes the burden of the management to balance the
maintenance
of the museum and heavy inflow of people.
Hence
, it should self rely in terms of revenue,
maintenance
and development. On the other side, there will be a negative impact as well if the entrance is charged. The major theme of museums is to display the heritage and history of the present generations along with recreation.
Hence
, people may opt for alternative choices available.
For example
, now-a-days people living in cities are reluctant to go physically to visit museums as they are preferably altering with cinemas, shopping etc.
for
Suggestion
For
spending time and mobiles to browse history, which saves visiting fee.
Therefore
, it might be a drawback with respect to attracting people to come out and visit. To conclude, disadvantages are shadowed by advantages in terms of managing.
Hence
, I completely agree to charge people who visit as it can revive itself for its
maintenance
and development even though few drawbacks exist.
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