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THE RECENT POPULARITY OF ONLINE SHOPPING WILL RESULT IN THE END OF HIGH STREET SHOPS. TO WHAT EXTENT DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#popularity #street #shops
Nowadays technology
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Nowadays, technology
 developed to
a
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an
 extent that shoppers prefer to do online shopping do to
conveniant
suited to your comfort or purpose or needs
convenient
 and easy delivery. In
this
 essay so extent agree that online shopping is getting
trend
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trendier
 in the younger generation people who are techno users and
this
 can see in the developed countries where
public
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the public
 will have
esay
posing no difficulty; requiring little effort
easy
 access to the technology
.
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.
 Recent studies done my Amazon shows that online shopping grown and demand is
incresed
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increasing
increased
 do to
lot
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a lot
lots
 of discounts and offers
availble
obtainable or accessible and ready for use or service
available
 only for online shopping.
Also
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 factor is that giving free deliver service to the shopper which reduce time and money. Another research done my Demand market
,
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,
result
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the result
 shows that around 73% of shopper prefer to do online shopping rather going to the
steert
take the first step or steps in carrying out an action
start
Stuart
street
shopes
a mercantile establishment for the retail sale of goods or services
shops
shapes
. In conclusion to
this
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an analytic or interpretive literary composition
essay
,
shopper
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the shopper
are
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is
 more
confortable
providing or experiencing physical well-being or relief
comfortable
 towards doing online shopping because of multiple benefits they get out it which result in very less chance choice for street shopping.
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