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Some people think governments should spend money on faster means of public transport. However, others think money should be spent on other priorities (eg cost, environment). Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

#people #governments #money #transport #priorities #eg #cost #environment
A growing number of advocates states that
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,
more money should be invested in public
transport
.But according to some folks
,
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,
government
 should
also
 invest in road construction
,
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,
environment
Suggestion
environmental
 issues
,
Accept space
,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
.Notwithstanding
,
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,
this
 disclosure will delve into both vantage points and
subsequently
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,
will explore my own perspective. Nowadays the pollution is increasing day by date due to increase in vehicles.So to avoid environmental damage
government
 should focus on public
transport
 so that public uses it more and due to that
government
 can get benefit in
boh
two things or people together
both
 the sides by generating more revenue and
also
 saving
environment
Suggestion
the environment
. If
government
 provides reliable and cost effective public
transport
,
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,
that public is
definetly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
 going
t
in the direction of
to
 use it.By using public
transport
 we are benefitting our environment and saving natural resources
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which will be saved for our future generations.
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