Children nowadays spend a great deal of time watching television. However, television can replace the book as a learning tool, which is why children are less well-educated today. To what extend do you agree with this statement?

In
this
new world of technology, for most of the people source of entertainment is television and children are not even deprived of it.
Moreover
, they spend their most of time in watching television and some even believe that
this
might replaces old book learning
system
. I disagreed with
this
statement and the reasons behind it are given below. To start with, children are mostly nowadays, more fond of watching cartoons and other animated movies and
therefore
they spend plethora of time in front of the screen, which in turn affects their eyesight and
this
is the reason why many children at a very young age have spectacles. What’s more, children are watching irrelevant content
such
as violence and abusing words, which in turn affects their behaviour and mental condition as well. On the other side, some believe that in future children gets there
education
using television,
however
, they thing that in
this
way children will get more interest in
education
and will get better
education
, but if
this
a case
then
it will not be a condition because in
this
way children will not come to get an interactive class which is possible only in face to face class with teacher in the classroom.
Furthermore
, children will loss its ability to read and write which is possible only with the old
system
of learning
that is
with book
system
. To conclude, there is no doubt that technology plays a vital role and in the near future everything is going to be digital, but I firmly, believe that it can never be able to replace our old way
education
system
completely.
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