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Academic achievements a school or university is the only true methods of a person's intelligence. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that people strive to achieve academic qualifications that make them get a good position in the standard evaluation of society.
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, I totally disagree with the statement that
intelligence
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 should be solely assessed by their success at school.
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, the
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 in school or college do not always reflect real academic
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 since test results are influenced by not only the
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 of testers but
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 other factors, both physically and mentally.
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, a brilliant student may happen to fail an ordinary exam if he is prone to an unexpected severe headache or an upcoming stressful event. These problems prevent his brain from working properly and
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 leads to poor results.
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, it is a fact that a greal deal of people in the world
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 still successful without joining any universities. There are some names who still receive human respect by making crucial contributions to human civilization, but not really depended on schools
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 as Bill Gates, Thomas Edison, Albert Einstein, etc.
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, academic
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 cannot exclusively determine the term "
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" in general.
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 is because impressive academic accomplishments play a part in nine types of
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intelligence, such
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 as Linguistic
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, Musical
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, Logic
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, etc.
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, those with musical
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 based on their strength can easily create or catch a melody and a song or perform a complex piece of music.
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 skills cannot essentially be learned on a course or from a book,
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, they may be talented musicians or singers, but do not need to be good students at school. In conclusion, I do believe that people cannot be judged based on their academic background alone. Those who can explore their abilities and take advantages of their
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 are likely to gain success in their life.
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