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Advertisements are becoming more and more common in everyday life. It is a positive or negative development>

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In recent years, there has been a growing tendency
on
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for
advertsing
a public promotion of some product or service
advertising
. In my opinion,
This
 phenomenon has both positive and negative influences On the one hand, Advertising
bring
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brings
 many benefits not only for customers but
also
 for
bussiness
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
businesses
. In fact, Many forms of
advertisement
 like commercial channel or junk
mail provide
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mail, provide
 consumer with information about products and services, Which lead to making better shopping choices for customers. Putting it on
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 ways, Advertising is
also
perfect strategy
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a perfect strategy
 for many companies. Thank to
advertisement
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advertise
 on TV, A large number of people can know about their items.
As a result
, They can sell more products. In
addtion
a component that is added to something to improve it
addition
, Advertising can raise people's
awearness
having knowledge of
awareness
 and knowledge about
procduct
commodities offered for sale
product
 development.
For instance
, Many people Who live in remove areas can know and approach technological devices like Smart phone and laptop through on
chanel
a path over which electrical signals can pass
channel
 tv, which help them have more
opporotuinities
a possibility due to a favorable combination of circumstances
opportunities
opportunity
 to know about what are
changging
marked by continuous change or effective action
changing
 around the world.
On the other hand
, Advertising have
also
 negative impacts on
humman
characteristic of humanity
human
humans
 life.
First
, many forms of
advertisement
 with inappropriate may be
harmfull
causing or capable of causing harm
harmful
 for
demental
childrens
a young person of either sex
children
. Since several commercial channels
containt
include or contain; have as a component
contain
contained
content
vilolent
acting with or marked by or resulting from great force or energy or emotional intensity
violent
 contents without having any controlling, children will imitate.
Second
, Organizations have to pay a huge amount of money on
advertisement
.
As a result
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In conclusion
s,
the cost of i
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the advertisement
t
ems will incre
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actually brings
actually bring
has actually brought
is actually bringing
ase highly I
nco
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to
nclusion,
advertisement
 acttualy bring
many be
power to direct or determine
control
controlled
nefits for human life,
However
 Government should controll and limited commercial channels to ensure that They have appropriate content with watcher
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