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Some schools are very strict about their school uniforms and the appearance of their pupils, while other schools have a very relaxed dresscode. What are the advantages and disadvantages of children of having a school uniform?

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Nowadays, in many
school
 facilities there are strict rules related to what the students can wear
or
of or belonging to us
our
 uniforms are mandatory.
On the other hand
, in some schools students are allowed to wear whatever they want, of course, their style should not be provocative. In
this
 essay, I will explain the pros and cons of having to wear a uniform. Wearing the same clothes as every other student in your
school
 or university is
actualy
in actual fact
actually
 very fun and, at the same time, makes all children equally.
For example
, some of the pupils can not afford designer label clothes and they do not dress well. Here the uniform is crucial, because in
this
 way the rich and the poor wear the same clothes and
noone
Suggestion
no one
 will feel different and shy, because of their clothes.
School
 is
place
Suggestion
placed
, where people go to study, not fashion shows, where every student should be a fashion icon.
On the other hand
, uniforms can be very uncomfortable sometimes and
also
 they cannot fit perfect for everyone. In
this
 case, where uniforms are sewed in 3 or 4 standard sizes the
obeesed
used improperly or excessively especially drugs
abused
 students will not feel comfortable and they will get bullied for how they look.
Also
, sometimes the uniforms are not suitable for hot weather and the person wearing them can get sweaty. Having to wear a uniform make, you don't wonder for hours what to wear at
school
. To sum up, uniforms are an effective way to remove the barrier between rich and poor children or students and make them more equal at
school
. From my point of view, dress code is not strange and if the uniforms are made one by one to fit perfect everybody they are something every
school
 must aim for.
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