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On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter •describe the item you lost •explain how you lost it •tell the insurance company what you would like them to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I hope you are doing well. My name is Shweta Bhat, and I am a premium member of your
company
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. I would like to inform you that I
have
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lost my
phone
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while
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 I was on
my
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vacation in Canada. It is S24 Pro black Samsung
phone
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 with
35-pixel
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a 35-pixel
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 front camera and
60-pixel
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a 60-pixel
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 back camera. The dimension of the
phone
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 is 24*12 cm.
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, it has 3 buttons, and it was in a black plastic
phone
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 case with
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 of
red
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the red
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 panda. I lost it when I was having lunch with my friend at Big Brother restaurant in Toronto. I had kept my
phone
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 on
table
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the table
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 and went to pay my bill,
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; when I came back the
phone
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 was not there. We searched the whole restaurant but were not able to find it. As
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 I have a travel insurance policy with the
company
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, so, I request the
company
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 to pay for my new
phone
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 because in my insurance
policy
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policy,
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 it is stated that the
company
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 will be covering my 100% travel charge. I would appreciate a quick response from you. Thank you. Yours Faithfully, Shweta Bhat
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea for clearer readability.
Coherence and Cohesion
Refine the transitioning between thoughts to ensure a smoother flow in the letter.
Task Achievement
Make sure all details about the lost item, the circumstances, and the request are clearly distinct and well-organized.
Task Achievement
The letter contains a clear and concise description of the lost item.
Coherence and Cohesion
The sequence of events leading to the loss is explained logically and clearly.
Task Achievement
The tone of the letter is polite and appropriately formal for a business correspondence.
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