New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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In the recent era of technical advancement, Some new devices have a greater impact in the minds of

childern

a young person of either sex

children

kids

a young person of either sex

Kids

nowadays gets

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nowadays get

used to it.

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, Current technology has its own benefits and pitfalls. To start with, there

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are

have been

always two sides of

coin

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a coin

the coin

. In the society, there are some rich people who provided their

childern

a young person of either sex

children

with

latest gadgets

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the latest gadgets

and devices.

This

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devices

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device

or technical tools help the children to nurture the minds of children in certain ways.

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for

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For

instance, Children can learn gaming

startegies

an elaborate and systematic plan of action

strategies

by playing online games on personal computers,

refers to the speaker or writer

pads and on mobile phones.

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, those kinds of strategies can be very helpful to the children while playing

real game

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a real game

real games

on the

filed

catch or pick up (balls) in baseball or cricket

field

. In

adition

a component that is added to something to improve it

addition

additions

to that, kids

also

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learn different things with the help of internet.

they

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They

can learn about their studies.

For example

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, there are many applications that they can use on the mobile devices or on

of me or myself

pads.

Furthermore

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, these kinds of advanced technical tools help them to

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

certain skills and knowledge Which is necessary in day to day practical life. On the

flipside

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flip side

, Children can

lost

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lose

their focus from studies and reluctant to do it. They become rigid and

frustreted

disappointingly unsuccessful

frustrated

if they are not provided with

latest

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the latest

tchnical

of or relating to technique or proficiency in a practical skill

technical

equipements

an instrumentality needed for an undertaking or to perform a service

equipment

. Research

have shown

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has shown

reverse impct

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the reverse impact

reverse impact

in the minds of children who are addicted to use play station or mobile phone throughout

whole day

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the whole day

. To add that, children

also

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behave

rudly

in an impolite manner

rudely

readily

to their parents if they are not given

such

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kinds of tools at

early age

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an early age

Ultimaelty

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Ultimately

, it will create

bad impact

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a bad impact

in their future

developements

act of improving by expanding or enlarging or refining

developments

. In conclusion, Children can be benefited from use of latest

technology but

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technology, but

it can

also

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have a negative impact in their mind if they are using frequently

with out

in absence of

without

any parental instructions or under parental

supervison

management by overseeing the performance or operation of a person or group

supervision

. It has more advantages than

pifalls

an unforeseen or unexpected or surprising difficulty

pitfalls

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

Introduction
Body paragraph 1 – advantages
Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

The main advantage is...
The disadvantage of this...
The main benefit...
Despite these advantages...
One possible drawback...

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Word repetition
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

305 words

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Digital literacy
Cyberbullying
Sedentary lifestyle
Inappropriate content
Self-learning
Screen time
Social inequality
Enhanced communication
Creative expression
Educational resources

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