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Some people think that the government should establish free libraries in each town. Others, however, believe that it is a waste of money since the public can use the Internet at home to obtain information. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Public libraries are commonly seen in many countries as places where citizens can read,
access
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 the Internet, or borrow books for free. While some people argue that the Internet can be a replacement for public libraries, I personally believe that public libraries are still important today. Those in
favor
promote over another
favour
 of free libraries in every town
believe
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believing
 that people can benefit from free libraries in a number of different ways. Public libraries have succeeded in providing local residents with equal
access
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 to
information
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, fostering
interests
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interest
 in literature and
arts
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the arts
, and promoting self-education and lifelong learning.
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, many modern public libraries provide other services
such
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 as free
access
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 to the Internet, weekend story sessions for preschool children to promote literacy, as well as study areas for their readers. While their primary function remains offering books that can be borrowed for free, public libraries have become community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
 in many towns where many people choose to spend their leisure time.
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, there are people who believe that free libraries are no
long
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longer
 necessary because the Internet can be an alternative way to
access
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information
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. While many pre-Internet books have been
digitalized
put into digital form, as for use in a computer
digitized
digitalised
, today new books are normally available in both printed and digital versions.
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Therefore it
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Therefore, it
 is clear that the Internet is becoming one of the most important channels for people to acquire
information
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. Many people prefer to read e-books because it is not only convenient to do so, but it
also
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 saves time and expenses
on
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for
 travelling to the library. In my opinion,
although
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 the Internet has become an important source of
information
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, it cannot completely replace traditional public libraries which not only help promote the enjoyment of reading, especially for those without computer literacy, but
also
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 function as community
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
.
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