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In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducting. What are the reason forthis how can this problem be solved.

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In modern life, visiting
art
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 galleries are decreased. Today, people are neglect to the
art
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.
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 essay will discuss the reasons why visit
art
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 galleries are decreasing and how can we solve that
problem
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. I represent some ways to solve those problems. Evidence suggests some people spend a lot of time on the internet. Actually, it indicated they have more entertainment from the past.
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, they don’t attention to
art
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, so they don’t go to a gallery. Museums and galleries should do something to persuade people to go there.
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, museums in the world can represent some of
art
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 on the internet or schools can teach to the children about the arts’ rule. To illustrate that, educating is important and educating can one way to solve that
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. The other way, they open galleries at the weekend when more people work off. So people can use the off time to visit galleries.
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, some galleries tickets are more expensive and families can’t afford to buy them. Actually, families prefer to spend money for food or other stuff things. But
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problem
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 can be solved, if
galleries attend
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galleries, attend
 to families
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 as can reduce the price of galleries tickets or some days they sale tickets with just 50 percentage of the real price. So the families can buy tickets. Summary, considering the points that discussed above,
art
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 ha important rule in real life, but today, people have a lot of entertainment and don’t go to the galleries.
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, there are several ways to solve that
problem
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