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Money should be spent on creating new public buildings such as museums or town halls rather than renovating the existing ones. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The chart illustrates the
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 of unemployed graduates (men and women) from 2008 to 2009. Overall, we can see that there were a lot more unemployed men than women in the period given. In general, there was more unemployment during the winter and autumn months, for both groups in October the most.
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, the percentage of unemployed women were the same for April 2008, July 2008, April 2009, it was the lowest number.
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, the highest
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 was in October 2008 and October 2009. As to men, as can be seen, the smallest number was in April 2008 and July 2008.
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, the greatest number of males who were out of work during the period was again in October both years.
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, despite the fact that they both have volatile structure, the
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 of women was more stable than the
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 of men and it differs approximately twice.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • evolving
  • aspirations
  • incorporate
  • accessibility
  • catalyst
  • economic development
  • heritage
  • conserves
  • cultural
  • integrity
  • operational inefficiencies
  • sustainably
  • repurpose
  • throwaway culture
  • carbon footprint
  • environmental degradation
  • context-specific
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