Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today's era, high profile people are gaining more popularity on the basis of their charming personality and unnecessary money, power rather than their performance which is giving a wrong impression on our present society.

This

essay will discuss how badly our generation is impacted by these media personalities in respect to their wealth and I strongly agreed with

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opinion. The main reason for

this

concern is unnecessary hype in wealth and living with the perception that money can buy and do anything, giving a false impression to society. Getting involved in drinking, smoking and other illegal activities as a status symbol and befalling people by supporting and intimating wrong portraits.

For example

, in 2012 SALMAN KHAN killed almost 4 people on the footpath which were sleeping there and later on the basis of his status and money power, he got saved. In

this

era, what we see is what we believe. Our young generation is following these celebrities’ footsteps so if they are disrespecting and devaluing our traditions and cultures, the latter will

also

follow the same, so they should behave in a responsible manner towards their society and set some examples which people should follow.

For example

, despite his huge wealth and high status, AMITABH BACHAN puts his father's name in forward in each and every of his own production movies, it's his way of giving respect to his father. In

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essay I concluded that the young generation should only focus on media personalities' reel achievements and should know the difference between reel and real life and adapt only valuable lessons in their life.

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Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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In some countries, air travel has become a much cheaper form of transport than in the past. Some people say this is a positive development. Others disagree. ﻿﻿Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

: Some people think that Olympic games are exciting events that bring other nations together. Others say Olympics is a waste of money and the money could be better spent on other things. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory jobs or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

In some countries, air travel has become a much cheaper form of transport than in the past. Some people say this is a positive development. Others disagree. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.