Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth rather than for their achievements, and this sets a bad example to young people. To What extent do you agree or disagree?

In today's era, high profile people are gaining more popularity on the basis of their charming personality and unnecessary money, power rather than their performance which is giving a wrong impression on our present society.
This
essay will discuss how badly our generation is impacted by these media personalities in respect to their wealth and I strongly agreed with
this
opinion. The main reason for
this
concern is unnecessary hype in wealth and living with the perception that money can buy and do anything, giving a false impression to society. Getting involved in drinking, smoking and other illegal activities as a status symbol and befalling people by supporting and intimating wrong portraits.
For example
, in 2012 SALMAN KHAN killed almost 4 people on the footpath which were sleeping there and later on the basis of his status and money power, he got saved. In
this
era, what we see is what we believe. Our young generation is following these celebrities’ footsteps so if they are disrespecting and devaluing our traditions and cultures, the latter will
also
follow the same, so they should behave in a responsible manner towards their society and set some examples which people should follow.
For example
, despite his huge wealth and high status, AMITABH BACHAN puts his father's name in forward in each and every of his own production movies, it's his way of giving respect to his father. In
this
essay I concluded that the young generation should only focus on media personalities' reel achievements and should know the difference between reel and real life and adapt only valuable lessons in their life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • glamour
  • wealth
  • achievements
  • portrayed
  • overshadow
  • influenced
  • lifestyles
  • unrealistic
  • expectations
  • values
  • promoting
  • hard work
  • perseverance
  • inspire
  • positive impact
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