The graphs below compare the number of cosmetic procedures performed on males and females in Korea in 2004. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two bar charts illustrate the
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, rhinoplasty and laser skin resurfacing, at 320,000, 280,000 and 210,000 procedures respectively. Meanwhile, breast enlargement and liposuction were least popular in female
, at 150,000 and 120,000 times respectively.
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surgery
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of abdominoplasty and facelift, which were only in male
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surgery
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