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In some countries, more and more adults are continuing to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages?

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Joint families are still exiting in some Asian countries, where adults prefer to continue their stay with their parents after completing the study and getting a job. While, there is a plethora of advantages of
this
 trend
such
 as, an emotional support, house chores, and financial stability, which outweigh any demerits. The essay will
further
 discuss both facets of a proposal with appropriate examples and reaches to a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with, one of the biggest benefits of a joint family is, an emotional support for a youngster, as we know when someone is pursuing their career they been through a lot of hurdles and in that situation a person need family.
Secondly
, when an individual is living with their parents, they most likely no need to do some house chores, like cooking, washing, because in a family tasks are always divided within the members.
Additionally
, parents are financial support for children, even though they are grown up, so financial burden gets reduced when someone is sharing a house with parents most importantly they do not need to pay bills immediately.
For example
, a study conducted on age category 20 to 30
,
Accept space
,
reflected that adults, who are living with their parents more physically and mentally stronger than those are staying alone.
On the other hand
, there are a few disadvantages too when staying with parents, one of the main problems is privacy, young people do not have any privacy and time for their own. Living with parents could make someone dependent from all sides and a person would face a lot of difficulties in their future.
For instance
, a girl, who is staying with her mother and father for her 30 years and suddenly move to any other country for study will face more obstacles as compared to a girl who is already staying separate from her parents. In conclusion,
therefore
, some demerits of a joint family present in today's society,
this
 trend is not suitable for modern community,
nevertheless
, an aforementioned trend still have valuable paramount benefits for a grown up, and it is helpful for both sides children as well as parents.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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