Nowadays parents give more freedom to their children than in the past. Is this is a positive or negative. Give your opinion .

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In
modern era
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the modern era
,
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,
parents give more liberty to their offspring as compare to previous time. It proved to be very fruitful for them because it has
plethora
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a plethora
of benefits which I discuss in the following paragraphs. To commence with
,
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,
there are
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plenty of reasons to support my viewpoint.
Initially
,
Accept space
,
minor
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minors
a minor
can get
great chance
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a great chance
to develop their personality as they take all decisions by
themself
reflexive form of "them"
themselves
. It proved harmful to face all
kind
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kinds
of bundles in their
life
.
For example
, earlier minor cannot take any important decision of their
life
and they were not much independent. So
,
Accept space
,
their
life
was fully depend on other people. But at present they are independent
that is
a positive development.
However
, toddlers can learn various lessons if they have
freedom
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the freedom
to do any work in their
life
because they
also
have
right
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the right
a right
to enjoy their
life
. Due to
this
, in their future they can become successful, as
children
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the children
would have knowledge regarding their
further
life
.
As a result
,
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,
parents do not need to worry for their offsprings.
Last
but not least
,
Accept space
,
by having freedom
childer
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can learn about technology as they can use it as well as gain new experience. To recapitulate
,
Accept space
,
although
it
put
Suggestion
puts
some negative effect on children yet it has proved beneficial for them. So
,
Accept space
,
according to me parents should aware their minors about the
further
process of their
life
.
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