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Some governments spend a lot of public money training individuals to be successful in international sporting events. Some people believe that this money should be spent on things that will benefit the general public instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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Success
 in international sporting events not only brings
glory
 to the sports person participating in the event but to the nation as well.
Therefore
, some countries spent a massive chunk of public
money
, which they collected from its taxpayers.
This
 results into a debate where a section of society is of the opinion that the taxpayer’s
money
 should be spent on
such
 as improving infrastructure, education, and health facilities so that it benefits to the countries' civilians. I completely agree with
this
 view and
this
 essay will give discuss the reasons before arriving at a logical conclusion.
To begin
 with,
success
 in international events brings
glory
 and pride of a nation.
Therefore
, to accomplish
this
 recognition at
such
 bigger platform, most of the governments, including the developing nations drained a huge amount of public
money
.
For example
, developing country like Brazil waste a lot of
money
 in preparing their cricket team for the
glory
 of their nation.
However
,
this
 extravagant spending would be totally wasteful as there is no guarantee of their athletic
success
 in the international arena.
On the other hand
, developing countries have other major issues to deal with rather than wasting
money
 on preparing athletes for big international events.
Firstly
, issues like Education, Healthcare services, and developing country infrastructure should be of the utmost important. These are the essential services, which assist in a country's growth.
For example
, in current Covid-19 pandemic scenario health care services are much needed than having
glory
 and pride at international events. All in all, considering there is no surety of the
success
 at international events, I strongly believe that wasting
money
 on preparing sports person, countries should spend
money
 on improving their essential services, which helps in
success
 and well-being of its citizens.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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