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Some people think that government should provide assistance to all kinds of artists, while some others think it is a waste of money. What is your opinion?

#people #government #assistance #kinds #artists #waste #money
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 CONSIDER A FRAMEWORK OF SOCIETY
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REFLECT PEOPLE TRADITIONAL AND NORM
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ARTIST REQUIRE FINANCIAL
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BESIDE MEMORIAL AND EMOTIONAL
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 TO BECOME CREATIVE AND MOTIVATED
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ASSISTANCE ALLMOST COME FROM PUBLIC BODIES
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LIKE
GOVERNMENT
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 AND OTHER PUBLIC ORGANIZATIONS. MY OPINION IS THAT
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MORE ASSISTANT TO
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WILL DEVELOP
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 AND IMPROVE IT
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BUILD A NEW GENERATION OF ARTISTS.NEGATIVE THINKING LIKE WASTE OF
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 MAKE A GAP BETWEEN ARTISTS AND POPULATION
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ALL THE
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 GIVEN FOR THEM WILL DIRECTED TO G
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 SERVICE
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 SOME PEOPLE DO NOT UNDERSTAND MEAN OF
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.I DISAGREE WITH THEM
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I BELIEVE
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 IS FACE OF ANY COUNTRY OR SOIETY
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SONG
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DRAMA OR FILM OR WHAT EVER APPEAR THE HUMAN
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NATIONAL INTERST AND GEAOGRAFIC NATURE EVEN.
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GOVERNMENT
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 NOWADAYS
SUPPORT
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BECAUSE
 THEY KNOW IT IS ONE OF FORCE OF POWER
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THEY HELP MEDIA LIKE TV
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 RADIO AND NEWSPAPER TO FOCUSE ON IT.
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 THEY BUILD ALOT OF ACADEMIC COLLEGES AND UNIVERSITY FACULTIES FOR
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 EDUCATION
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EITHER UNDERGRADUATE OR POST GRADUATE STUDIES TO INCOURGE STUDENT AND NEW APPLICANT FOR
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 TYPE OF EDUCATION, THERE IS ALOT OF ARTIST NOW ADAYS BECOME POPULAR
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AND THEY PROVIDE MANY SOCIAL ACTIVITIES AND ASSIST PEOPLE
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MOST OF THEM
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COMMON, AND
 KNOWN
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SPECIALLY IN SOCIAL MEDIA
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 IN CINEMA
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SINGER OR ACTORS.THEY CONSIDER AMMBASADOR OF THEIR COUNTRIES
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LIKE MICHEL JAKSON OR BOB MARLEY. IN CONCLUTION I BELIEVE
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SUPPORT
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 MUST BE
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AND I REFUSE REGARDING THINKING IT IS ONLY
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 WASTE.I HOPE ALL
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 IN ALL COUNTRIES AROUND THE WORLD THINK POSITIVELY TO THE DIFFERENT SORT OF
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.AND IMPOWER IT.
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