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Describe your leisure time and give your opinion about advantages and disavantages of having too much leisure time

#leisure #time #disavantages
as
Suggestion
As
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 work a full
time
 job in
private organization
Suggestion
a private organization
the private organization
.
Accept space
.
it
Suggestion
It
 is not easy for me to find a lot of
leisure
time
,
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,
same like other people who work six days a week
,
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,
only weekend consider a suitable
time
 to do some hobbies.
firstly
Suggestion
Firstly
,
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,
in
weekend
Suggestion
the weekend
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 take my family to enjoy a free
time
 and relax
,
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,
which make us fresh to start again
,
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,
we do
alot
Suggestion
a lot
 of hobbies
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
,
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,
for
example we
Accept comma addition
example, we
 go to the sport club every
friday
the sixth day of the week; the fifth working day
Friday
 to
paly
participate in games or sport
play
 tennis
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 like table tennis
,
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,
as much as my wife
,
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,
befor
earlier in time; previously
before
 we have played in university team
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 took a lot of
shampions
someone who has won first place in a competition
champions
.some
time
 we go to special resturant or cafe to take coffe or food,we love chinese sea food ,as we was living in china for three years,reading abook is favourite thing i do in my
leisure
time
 , i like to read polotical books from american writer,
secondly
,too much
leisure
time
 consider
time
 waste,has disadvantages like negative thinking,consume
time
 in wrost habit and may be make some people to deviate,for exampls some people has too much
leisure
time
 may become drug abuser or stay in tv for along period,all
this
 habit affect human health and may lead to depression,in other hand ,if anybody find he has too much
leisure
time
 ,may consider advantage ,
for example
 ,student in summer vaccation ,they can spend these
time
 in studing or reading ,or any school program .
some
Suggestion
Some
 people go to
gym
Suggestion
the gym
 or become
apart
Suggestion
a part
 of social activities.
in
Suggestion
In
 conclusion
,
Accept space
,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 spend my
leisure
time
 to
built
Suggestion
build
 my skills and grow competencies
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 never look to it as
waste
Suggestion
wasting
time
,
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,
it
it is
it's
achance
Suggestion
a chance
 to get away from the pressure of work and daily duties
,
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,
if we
benifit
financial assistance in time of need
benefit
 from it
,
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,
that is
 great advantages.
while
Suggestion
While
 too much
leisure
time
with out
in absence of
without
 plan and programs is a
seriouse
concerned with work or important matters rather than play or trivialities
serious
series
 problem
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