The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing task 1

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing task 1
The given images represent a wave-energy machine, and its modern updates, but
also
the place where it can be located. In
this
essay
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I am going to examine both images and give a relevant conclusion. The first image relates
a
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wave-energy machine and the way
is
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it
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functioning
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. As we can see the main characteristics of the machinery are: the turbine,
electricity
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the electricity
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generator, and
the
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two chambers. These are the main features necessary for
this
mechanism to function.
Comparing
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with the old model of
this
kind, the difference
of
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the new one is given by the two chambers. These two separate rooms allow
water
to enter
in
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the first space, which after
that is
transformed into
air
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the air
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,
that
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which
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is pushed into the
second
chamber.
For
this
reason
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the modern model is faster, and it can produce more energy
then
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than
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the old one. The
second
image illustrates the areas where
this
mechanism can be found and
the
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construction of it. As we can see they are fully
depended
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on
water
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the water
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and
this
is the main factor which
determinate
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the cost. Deeper
the
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water
means a higher construction and inevitably a higher budget for the finishing of the project.
On the other hand
, if the
water
is more shallow,
then
the installation price is
with
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no
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a
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doubt lower.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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