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Each year, the crime rate increases. What are the causes of crime and what could be done to prevent this rise in criminal activity?

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Crime
 is becoming an issue of increasing concern all around the world. The number of criminal activity is growing and the reasons for
this
 trend are countless. In my opinion, unemployment and poverty are the key
factors
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factors, however
however
, governments can tackle
this
 issue by improving
job
 opportunity
in addition
 to imposing a stricter punishment law. One undeniable reason why people commit a
crime
 is the significant increase of unemployment rate. People with no paying
job
 cannot afford the high cost of living or buy their essentials including food and clothes.
Moreover
, most of unemployed people are not educated and have no skills or qualifications to work and earn
salary
Suggestion
a salary
 and as a consequence they live in poverty. In most cases, they steal to fund themselves or do other petty crimes. If these offenders continue these habits may lead to more organized and gun
crime
.
Crime rate
Suggestion
The crime rate
A crime rate
Crime rates
 can be reduced by punishing the criminals and enforce the criminal law. Punishments
such
 as fine and prison sentence can act as
deterrent
Suggestion
a deterrent
 not only to stop criminals to re-
offend but
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offend, but
also
 others who think of committing a
crime
. According to a research conducted on prisoners, around 75% of them stop doing any criminal activity after they released from jail.
Furthermore
,
government
Suggestion
the government
 should improve citizen’s standard of living by providing education and vocational training to promote employment
opportunity particularly in
Suggestion
opportunity, particularly in
 poor areas. If those people can get a
job
 with reasonable salary, they will be self-sufficient and better citizens. In conclusion,
crime
 is a result of low-economic status of people and poor life.
In addition
 to common punishments that
government
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the government
 should apply to ensure that people are following the rules, improving education and
job
 opportunity are other measures that can help to
reducing
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reduce
crime level
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crime levels
the crime level
.
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