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pollution is a very serious problem today. what level of pollution should be tolerate? Discuss examples of different types of pollution.

#pollution #level
In the era of materialisation,
pollution
 is a dangerous situation for folks. Everyone needs a 100% facilities to live their life, but no one knows how harmful that result.
This
 essay will analyse about various types of
pollution
 and how human ought to suffer before citing the conclusion.
To begin
 with, What is
pollution
? So,
pollution
 which is created by human negligence. There are major
pollution
such
 as
air
,
Accept space
,
water
,
Accept space
,
land and many more.
Firstly
,
air
pollution
 occurs main by toxic gases from industries and vehicles. In research, now automobile productions have increased in the past few years, because now every person mainly travelling by own vehicles, which leads to emission of carbon dioxides. In globalisation era, every country runs behind their economic condition, by solving those issues they have been made major industries. Industries leaves so many toxic gases in the
air
 likes
air
, carbon monoxide,
sulfer
a soft white precious univalent metallic element having the highest electrical and thermal conductivity of any metal; occurs in argentite and in free form; used in coins and jewelry and tableware and photography
silver
sugar
safaris
 and many more.
secondly
Suggestion
Secondly
,
Accept space
,
water
pollution
 is the most dangerous
pollution
.
water
Suggestion
Water
 is a basic needs in everyone's life. But, nowadays folks not taking a serious step to save
water
.
For instance
, industries use to leave their toxic
water
 in a river which contains a
water
, people throw plastic in river, looks which is used in visitors place.
Moreover
, land
pollution
, using a more pesticide and artificial fertilizers for a major production of foods. To recapitulate, by analysing all above points it seems to me that we should aware and think about the
pollution
, because we are now at that level of
pollution
 which we should not suffer because millions of people died in cause of
water
 and
air
pollution
.
Submitted by Aakash Patel on

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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