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If countries are serious about solving traffic problems, they should tax private cars very heavily and use the money to provide free or very cheap rail travel. To what extent do you agree?

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It is argued that solving traffic congestion in some countries can be resolved by levying
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 on private cars and providing citizens with free and affordable
rail
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transport
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. I strongly agree to applying
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 on the purchase of vehicles for private use and would be providing supporting evidence in
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 essay. Concurrently, traffic congestion is a reason for the increase in pollution and accidents caused which can in turn be reduced with the help of allowing public
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 access to everyone in cheap. Higher excise applied on cars would evidently increase
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 for the economic growth
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 The
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 levied from
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 source can be used for building a stronger and punctual
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 system. When more people accesses
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 for
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, revenue increases from
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 source and government can use it for various other public development arenas.
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, India started implementing the duty for cars and the
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 levied is used for providing cheap
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 for people by
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. It is evident that high duty on cars will eventually curb the consumption and demand and
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 reducing the lower number of wheels on the road. Lower traffic on the road would lead to lower accidents. In conclusion, it can be deduced that higher
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 on private vehicles will lead to a stronger
rail
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 system which can be made cheaper by government.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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