Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

I agree that

music

can bring people from different cultures and ages together. In general, it is difficult for people of different cultures and ages to get together and build trust with each other. I think

music

is a good bridge. Why

music

can be a bridge between people? Because

music

creators are born in the

music

to give emotion and life. People who have the same life experiences or perceptions are particularly prone to resonance.

Music

can be a good communication tool to convey emotions through the rhythm. In China, there are many ethnic minorities,

such

as the Yi people in Taiwan, who express their emotions through

music

. Many outsiders come to the place and quickly blend in through their beautiful songs and feel their hospitality.

Furthermore

music

is borderless, And the people who love them

also

break boundaries, whether it's religion or culture or age, it doesn't important. In my hometown will

holding

Suggestion

hold

regularly

Suggestion

regular

classical concerts. There will be many people of different ages and backgrounds and even foreigners

，

Accept space

they can communicate happily and even gain friendship. So, wherever you are,

music

is like a magic to bring different people together.

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3Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
1Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Grammar mistakes
 

4 paragraphs

192 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

5.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

universal language
evoke
connect
diverse audiences
cultural exchange
generational gaps
shared experiences
unifying force

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