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Some parents buy their children a large number toys of toys to play with , What are the advantages and disadvantages for the child of having a large number of toys

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It is true that nowadays some parents spend sums of money to buy a large number of toys for their children. It has advantages and disadvantages which would be a part of
this
 discussion in
this
 essay. Toys are the things which every child had a dream to get, which gives them pleasure and fun which is the main merit of that many parents do so.There many parents try to get many toys for their children. It is a good thing and every parent wants a smile in the face of their children. It would be very useful for the child that they could spend their time playing with the toys and could not disturb their parents while they do work or something else. Many parents buy toys just to make their children busy. If it has many advantages,
then
 it
then
 it
also have
Suggestion
also has
 many disadvantages that when their parents spend much of money in buying toys for their children,
then
 they are wasting much of the money because one day or other the toys would not be used in the future or can be destroyed or can be broken by the child. The
next
 thing what if the kid swallow the toy that can risk his life.
Then
 parents had to be very careful with the children. Many parents can't afford toys, but they buy toys just for the sake of their children and they lost much of the wage in buying of these things. Many parents do not spend time with their children because they buy toys to make them bushy
Therefore
, I believe that every parent should buy a less toys for their children and should not waste much of the wealth in the toys.
Instead
 they should spend time with them and they should try to avoid buying expensive and a large number of toys for their children.
Instead
 of spending salary on toys they should help others who are very poor and needed.
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