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Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

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It is considered that studying aboard
becomes
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to become
 more increasingly common in the
last
 few years, especially for young people from China. Many students consider
benefits
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the benefits
 of studying aboard outweigh the sacrifices involved. These young people can absorb various cultural
difference
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differences
 and broaden their horizon. Many governments are willing to provide a huge sum of sponsorship to support their young people to study in universities overseas. In
returns
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return
, young people can contribute their new insight and technique to their home countries.
For example
, China sent a group of students to various mature countries in
early days
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the early days
. And, many of them become famous engineers and scientists to help build up a stronger China.
Therefore
, studying aboard can help boost up the growth of youngsters and their home countries.
On the other hand
, these countries may need to face the “brain drain” problem. Most young people build up their life – long friendships when they study in universities overseas. At the same time, well – developed countries usually can offer more comprehensive and attractive opportunities to youngsters. Because of the above – mentioned reasons, many of them choose to stay in foreign countries to start their new life and develop their career path.
For instance
, more and more famous scientists in the United States
comes
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come
 from China.
Thus
, students
is not necessarily return
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are not necessarily returning
do not necessarily return
have not necessarily returned
 to their home countries after graduation. To conclude,
although
 governments need to invest a huge sum of money on their youngsters to study aboard and face “brain drain” problem, new insight and technique are
also
 brought into their countries once these young students are graduating.
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