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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. The use of social media is replacing face-to-face interaction among many people in society. Do you think the advantages outweigh the advantages? You should write at least 250 words

#minutes #media #interaction #people #society
At the moment in
21st century when
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the 21st century, when
the 21st century when
 the technology refines.A lot of people use telephone and internet
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 We have lots of social media.Folk frequently apply media like
Whats
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What's
 App
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Instagram
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 Telegram and etc. Social media have many
intractions
the force by which one object attracts another
attractions
interactions
. That's why you can speak with
person
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a person
the person
 who is travelling in the other country or
materic
the tangible substance that goes into the makeup of a physical object
materials
.
In
addition before
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addition, before
 all of
this
plural of "this"
these
 people communicate with letters and it was so difficult because you do not know when your letter will reach for the addressee. From my point of view
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 I speak with my sister when she was in the
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
 country, we talked everyday.I
can not
can not
cannot
 say like
this
, that's why we talk every hour. Lot's of the social media are not as good as they are cracked up to be. There are drawback on the internet
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 You see
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 the networks develop so swift
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may be
by chance
maybe
 it is minus for us. Many new social networks appear
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 which are used from the oldest to the youngest people
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which
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Which
 is not good, because here you can easily be deceived
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 it can be a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
 environment for scammers.
For instance
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 at the moment we have lots scammers whether they covered by the name of your relatives and asked to send them the money
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 And they are talking
lile
prefer or wish to do something
like
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 they need
money
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the money
 because of unforeseen circumstances or they do not look
in
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at
 the pink of health
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led
appropriate to; intended for
for
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an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centre
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be staying
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