Some people say that sports play an important role in society. Others, however, think that it is nothing more than a leisure activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

In
this
stressful world, physical activities
are chose
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are chosen
are choosing
to assist
human
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humanity
in mitigating tension and sports are no exception.
However
, there are numerous controversial perspective
about
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on
this
matter. While many people think that sports act as a vital function, objectors claim that
this
activity is not worth being paid too much attention. From my point of view, I am in favour of both views and my reasons will be clarified in
this
essay To commence with, we cannot deny that humanity reaps huge fruit from sports.
Firstly
, the benefits
are
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is
mostly
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most
evident through the improvement of
our both physical and
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both our physical and
mental health.
Scientist
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The scientist
A scientist
has proved
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has proven
that doing physical recreation can reduce the risk of heart diseases, stroke and obesity..
Moreover
, they may prevent us from psychological problems
such
as
alzheimer
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Alzheimer
, depression,... According to Vietnam Health Newspaper, there are approximately 60% of depressed
patients which
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patients, which
were cured due to
opstimisticly
doing sports The
second
advantage is developing our social skills. Athletes could be a good example here. The sports like: football, badminton or volleyball
require
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requires
players to have
cooporation
joint operation or action
cooperation
corporations
and communication skills that we hardly find in
workplace
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the workplace
.
On the other hand
, I do not consent in account of their drawbacks. Because not only sport
players but
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players, but
also
management company can make money from wins, the sports are easy to become
commercialization
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commercialized
.
For instance
, countless firms and individuals
have organising
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have been organising
have organised
are organising
were organising
have been organised
illegal betting
activies
any specific behavior
activities
actives
activism
in their nation and even across the country which makes plenty of people become empty after only one night.
Additionally
, because of the lure of
vitories
, some athletes have resorted unethical means to win the matches. To conclude,
altho
u
refers to the speaker or writer
I
gh i believe that nothing can displace physi
cal activ
any specific behavior
activities
ites in our life, the disadvantages of
this
kind of activity cannot
be den
declare untrue; contradict
denied
nied
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Include an introduction and conclusion

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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