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More and more students are going to another country for higher education. Do the advantage of this outweigh disadvantage?

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Nowadays,
education
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 is very important for any person. It is said that the number of students moving to other countries for higher
education
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 is increasing day by day. Let us discuss the benefits and the negative sides for a better understanding. On the one side, enrolling for higher
education
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 for students in foreign countries has some advantages. Some countries like Canada, New Zealand, America and England are well developed and they provide better
education
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 to the students. Youngsters who get a degree or certificate after finishing their college from these countries are internationally accepted.
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, In these nations graduates are able to find a job easily according to their subject learned.
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, my uncle moved to Canada for
further
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 studies and he now, works as an accountant there.
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 is happening only because the
country
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 provides proper
education
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 to their students to achieve their goals. On the flip side, The
country
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 where the students belong to would loss their educated people.
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, if more and more people will go to another
country
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 to study
there
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there, then
then
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 the actual
country
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 remain without students with high level of
education
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.
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, the
country
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lose
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loses
 their upcoming businessmen who are the betterment of the
country
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 growth to run their business. To conclude, there are more advantages than drawbacks to study in overseas countries for students. There is nothing without
education
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 in
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 world.
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, students should
persue
carry out or participate in an activity; be involved in
pursue
 degree from countries which are
valuable
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valued
 worldwide to get success in their life.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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