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It is expected that there will be a higher proportion of older people than that of young people in many countries in the future? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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The increase in average life expectancy, paired with lower fertility rates, has contributed to the aging
population
. In several ways, society may benefit from a growing proportion of senior citizens.
However
, I believe the rest of the world
population
 would have to shoulder much more responsibilities and the global economy would face a serious
labour
 crisis. On the positive side, an increase in the number of old people means a great deal of volunteers for community and government projects. Compared with young people, retirees are more financially comfortable and
therefore
 are more willing to contribute free
labour
 for the sake of the development of the whole society.
For example
, there are groups of elderly people established to offer free education for underprivileged children or to provide shelter and food for the homeless and the impoverished in their neighbourhoods.
In addition
, the elderly are familiar with traditional culture and way of life. They,
hence
, hold moral values to pass on the young generation, playing the key role in preservation of cultural identity, which is fading in the era of globalization.
Nevertheless
, old people over the age of 65 are mostly unable to keep contributing to their countries’ economic development due to their health problems;
therefore
, they have to live with their children or social welfare under the form of pension.
Also
, the elderly have greater demand for health care services.
As a result
, the taxpayers will not only have to pay for the increased retirement pensions and health care costs but
also
 bear a greater financial burden and work harder.
Secondly
, aging
population
 can
also
 mean the shrinking number of young workforce and
labour
 shortage. Lack of
labour
 workforce would cause stagnation for the growth of businesses and the global economy as a whole. Japan,
for example
, one of the developed countries confronts
this
 problem is already experiencing these impacts. In conclusion, while the increasing percentage of aging
population
 has several positive impacts, I believe the drawbacks of
this
 trend are much greater.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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