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The tendency for news reports in the media to focus on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individual and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The tendency for news reports in the media to focus on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individual and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree? In the 21th century, there is a great competition for policy, economy,
societal
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society
 and etc.
between
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Between
 countries in all around the world which is reported by the news of the media to show the country’s
position
 is progressing or regress and difficulty and crisis
position
 in each section that can affect on people’s mind and their life. A good reason to abolish is the activity that people should do in
tension
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tensed
position
, so if they do not know that what they should do, they will surprise and
this
position
 has more detrimental affection to their personal life and to society. In
this
position
, people feel more stressful than they know the bad event on the way and they should do something. I should say, think about a volcano will happen, so people should know that they have to leave the city! Or they will be buried. In the other hand, all of us know that there are various problems in each country. Like
this
 new virus that came from china and promotion in all around the world and not only it is effect on people’s life, but
also
 has
effect
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an effect
 on the country’s economy and some company closed and some employee lost their job. Sometime there is a solution to solve the problem but sometime there is not. By the way, they should know to do at least some health protocols. In conclusion,
although
 the bad news reported has
destructive affection
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a destructive affection
on
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of
 the people’s mind and create the feeling of anxiety to a large number of audience but the government and people try to solve it.
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