many people work long hours, leaving very lite tire for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

It is important to have a pastime

besides

working. A myriad of people work hard and do not dedicate any time

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rest.

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essay will look at the disadvantages of working overtime, and I firmly believe the result of

this

kind of living, brings us nothing but disadvantages. Many individuals are working hard without any time for entertainment. In fact, If someone works and does not have proper rest, his mental health suffers.

Moreover

, our brains not

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need to get rid of the daily routines but

also

need to do something for fun. To bring more credit to

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argument, I should draw your attention to the research of MIT University which shows our wisdom will be suffered after 2 weeks without any leisure activities. Needless to say, more serious consequences are considerable in the long term. Some people become workaholics. Indeed, they are working as much as possible and take no practical rest.

In addition

,

this

way of living is bringing them nothing but more distance between them and their families.

Similarly

, their kids find themselves with a lack of emotional support and

this

leads them to keep their distance from their work-addicted parents. I believe that it is possible for each of us to become a workaholic one day,

hence

it is important to evaluate ourselves, every now and

then

, with the appropriate gauges to predict ourselves from being a workaholic. In conclusion, the consequences of working hard with no pastime on the body are undeniable, and it is each person's responsibility to be considerate of his mental health and have some time for his pleasure activities. I think we should be

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the disadvantages of being a workaholic.