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Some people think that foreign visitors should be charged more than locals when they visit cultural and tourist attractions in a country. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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 with, there is a conception that the prices of cultural and historical attractions had better be more expensive for foreign
travelers
a person who changes location
travellers
 than inhabitants
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The reason of ‘two-tier price’ is much higher disposable income of tourists than
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As an example
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overseas visitors get used to travelling per year, whereas local people cannot afford to go abroad even once in their lives
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, there are other arguments to differential pricing. Since residents are contributing to
upkeep
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the upkeep
 of their national heritage through taxes
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Annually, part of the profit of the local population is used to repair of cultural buildings
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Apart from that, the impact of mass tourism on historical places requires a lot of money to preserve and renovate them adequately
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, foreign visitor does not care about the cleanliness and beauty of place,
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it needs more effort and finance to keep them the same
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On the other hand
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no one likes to think they have paid more than someone else for the same thing
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Foreigners are treated as a great source of money by some locals.
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the reason why tourists afford to travel is not that they are overburdened with money
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To get
chance
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a chance
the chance
 to entertain and relax overseas once a year they have to save their wage
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After being charged more make them consider that nation greedy and thoughtless which lead to a decline of their prestige among other countries
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As a consequence
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the number of foreign visitors in that country is likely to reduce. In conclusion
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 the two-tier payment structure is unfair for tourists, locals tend to sustain their tourism system and protect valuable resources with the help of ‘tourist price’.
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