The tendency for news reports in the media to focus on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to the individual and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Living in ideal gesture, no war, no weapons, no violence is everyone's wish, not only people who are living in
the poor
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poorer
the poorest
countries. Hearing news in terms of killing our counterparts and even other live creature is not
satisfaction
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satisfactory
satisfying
for everyone.
Accordingly many
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Accordingly, many
people nagging about the objects that the media share with
public
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the public
and they suggest that the government should omit the harmful news and use of the positive and emergency
informations
a message received and understood
information
. But they do not consider
catastrophic consequences
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the catastrophic consequences
on society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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