Today, the high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Consumers purchased more and more
merchandises
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merchandise
nowadays. They often use the
product
only a few times and put them aside. I think it is true that advertisements affect people to buy some unnecessary products. People see various advertisements around them
everyday
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every day
, which can be very tempting for consumers to purchase some popular goods.
For instance
, when we are using search platform
such
as Google and there are advertisements popping out most of the time.
Additionally
, we can see commercials on video platform
such
as YouTube as well. Manufactures know the way to capture
consumers’ interest
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the consumers’ interest
and use the power of advertising to disseminate their products.
For example
, if teenagers see advertisements about some fancy high tech products and they will ask their parents to pay for the bill. They will enjoy playing the
product
at the beginning and lose interest very soon. Quite frankly, most of the advertisements are exaggerating quality and function of a
product
. Advertisers edit a
product
’s
photos
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photo
in order to improve its appearance. And they might put some special effects on a commercial as well.
Consequently
, the
product
appears to be more attractive.
Furthermore
, advertisers keep emphasizing the importance of products to consumers. In my experience, I’ve purchased a skinny jeans from an online platform. The commercial of showing that jeans
was
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were
fashionable and beautiful. But when I tried to put it on and the jeans
was
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were
very tight. It was not stretchable as the commercial described. I felt bad and put
this jeans
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these jeans
aside from
then
on. In conclusion, the description of a
product
from an advertisement which can be deceiving sometimes. I totally agree that
advertisement
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the advertisement
an advertisement
has bad impact for consumers, leading them to buy products which they don't truly need in the society.
Submitted by Peggy XIA on

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