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Theme: It is more important for schoolchildren to learn about local history than world history. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

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History is essential for everyone to learn about the
culture
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 and it is necessary for academic students to learn it. I entirely agree with the view that learning local things is more important than world's for children because it would be helpful to survive in
local community
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the local community
local communities
 as well as for attachment to local people.
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 and foremost, to learn own play a crucial role to live a better life in
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nation as
 every society has some different rituals and believes;
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, everyone knows about them in order to a
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mix up
 with society. Local language,
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, is essential to know to communicate with the local community because there are many languages but different regions have their own
ancestor's
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ancestors'
 language. If children do not know about local things, it will cause problems in the future to understand their own
culture
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. Another reason to learn regional
culture
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 is that children attach to their
culture
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 if it is taught to them in the classroom. In
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 way, they can learn about
artifact
a man-made object taken as a whole
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 buildings and
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 get to know about the sacrifices of elders for areas. According to the report of specialists, children who do not learn about their history in school as a consequence, they cannot inculcate the habit of learning things about the local area. If children know about the importance of historical buildings, they would take initiatives to maintain these old memories. To conclude, it is elucidated that learning history in school is important for children in order to be a prudent person of
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