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Should governments spend so much money on space exploration when there are problems on Earth that need to be solved?

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Many countries are spending billions of dollars on
space
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 exploration each year. The main purposes of the
space
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 programs are discovering the alternative
liveable
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living
 planet, finding water and other living creatures. Since
it
it is
it's
 been many years different countries are funding a big proportion of expenditure only for
space
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 exploration in competitive reasons too. The well-recognized organization NASA is established specifically for
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 purpose. Whereas it has been a matter of argument from the beginning and I firmly believe the government should spend less money than using now on
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 projects. Every
year millions
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year, millions
 of people are dying of starvation around the globe, and the world is facing the worst global warming condition at the moment. The human race is living in an environment where they have to go through different kinds of man-made and natural disasters and millions have been losing their lives because of these reasons. We must not forget that the need for humility should always come
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. The earth where we are living that should get help
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 and should be funded to more than the governments are doing. Obviously, we have seen the power of Google Maps and improvement in communications between countries as a boon of the satellite. Imagine now, other powerful countries have satellites to spy on us and can position weapons directly above our country. For these reasons, it would be a good idea to be able to stave that off. If we decided to stop "wasting" money on
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 programs
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