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Some students work while studying. This often results in lacking time for education and constantly feeling under pressure. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

#students #work #results #time #education #pressure
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Working during studying is a common sight in every country. Most of the
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 it is in order to fulfil monitory requirement.
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 kind of situation creates mental pressure, which causes negative impact on
education
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 and health above all. Every problem have solutions, so my suggestion is, students should handle the condition with a positive attitude which will help them to overcome
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 problem successfully. All students don’t get admission in a government
college
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. In that case they have to enrol in a private
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 and nowadays it is a huge amount of money for admission which is beyond the ambit of many people. So pupils start working on a per-
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 or full
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 job and many students fail to maintain the work,
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 balance
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 they don't get expected marks. After spending the large fee a bad result is just a waste of money
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 students have to work very hard on a worthy full way with motivation. A good
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 management plan, regular meditation can be worthwhile for them. Most of the
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 students change their hometown to pursue a better career with a better
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 and they need to defray the accommodation and meal expenses as well. Therefor my suggestion is to select the distance
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 option to cut down the expenses. At
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, I would like to request the government to look after the private
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's fee structure, because most of the
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 they demand unnecessary charges, government should make
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 affordable for non affluent students as well. Or students can choose a job related to learning, like private tuition, it will help them to stay in touch. To conclude, hard work always brings a good up-short. So students have to manage
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, as there are 24 hours in a day for all. A positive mindset is helpful to concur the battle.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial necessity
  • Tuition
  • Living costs
  • Employability
  • Work experience
  • Under pressure
  • Mismanagement
  • Time-management
  • Academic pursuits
  • Flexible part-time study
  • Financial aid
  • Scholarships
  • Bursaries
  • Collaboration
  • Integrated programs
  • Education
  • Work-life balance
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