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Some people think that more money should be spent on protecting endangered species while others think it is waste of valuable money. What is your opinion?

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It has been argued whether the government should be concerned with the environment and with
species
 facing extinction. Whilst some consider
this
 a waste of resources, others think environmental protection should be a number one priority. In my point of view, taking care of the fauna is a way to preserve the natural balance and should be one of the major society’s concerns.
Fisrt
preceding all others in time or space or degree
First
Fist
 and foremost, the environment was
desinged
done or made or performed with purpose and intent
designed
 to maintain a perfect balance. The food chain is a cycle that, with a missing part, may be
bronken
physically and forcibly separated into pieces or cracked or split
broken
 and jeopardize the entire
sistem
instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity
system
systems
.
Therefore
, by overlooking the risk a kind of animal is suffering, the human race may be neglecting the hazard that the entire ecosystem is being put in. Even though, some individuals argue that there are a lot of problems in society that should be
prioratized
assign a priority to
prioritized
prioritised
 (prioritized), the concern with the planet we live in cannot be left aside.
Otherwise
, human beings would be in danger as well.
Furthermore
, the
endangerement
a source of danger; a possibility of incurring loss or misfortune
endangerment
 of many
species
 was a consequence of the humankind’s acts.
Hence
, it is plausible that we should
also
 be the ones responsible to find the solutions to the problem.
Moreover
, since we are the most intellectually advanced
species
 on Earth, we have the duty to take care of the other living creatures on
this
 planet. In summary, despite the several problems our
governers
the head of a state government
governors
 have to fix in our society, due to our past
neglicenge
 and the superior intelligence human beings were gifted with, it is our
resposibility
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
 to protect other living creatures on Earth.
Otherwise
, we may be putting our own
species
 at risk.
Submitted by Lucas Andrade Gomes on

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