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today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? what measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

#people #measures #epidemic
Nowadays, many folk is gaining weight than ever before. In
this
 paragraph both causes and solution are discussed below.
To begin
 with, both parents are on the job, and have no space to make meals for themselves and for children. So they order or
buy
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by
 fast cuisine from various restaurants. With an eating habit of fast food stuff people becomes overweight.
Moreover they
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Moreover, they
 do not do any exercises on a daily basis and
also
 children did not play any outdoor sports.
this
Suggestion
This
 is
also
 a reason of people becoming overweight. More so they spent more point on a mobile phone and do not any work.
Also they
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Also, they
 only do sitting jobs and keeping on sitting.
On the other hand
, there are many solutions to overcome
this
 problem.
Firstly people
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Firstly, people
 should do and motivate others to do various exercises and play sports.
Secondly they
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Secondly, they
 should avoid eating fast feed and prefer home made feed because
this
 feed is hygienic and good for health.
Moreover parents
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Moreover, parents
 should spend more life with their children, so they did not use mobile phones for a long time. To conclude people should lose weight by doing exercise and with
this
 they remain fit and healthy.
Also they
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Also, they
 live a long time.
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