today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? what measures can be taken to overcome this epidemic?

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Nowadays, many folk is gaining weight than ever before. In
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paragraph both causes and solution are discussed below.
To begin
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with, both parents are on the job, and have no space to make meals for themselves and for children. So they order or
buy
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fast cuisine from various restaurants. With an eating habit of fast food stuff people becomes overweight.
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Moreover they
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Moreover, they
do not do any exercises on a daily basis and
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children did not play any outdoor sports.
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this
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a reason of people becoming overweight. More so they spent more point on a mobile phone and do not any work.
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Also they
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Also, they
only do sitting jobs and keeping on sitting.
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, there are many solutions to overcome
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problem.
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Firstly people
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Firstly, people
should do and motivate others to do various exercises and play sports.
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Secondly they
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Secondly, they
should avoid eating fast feed and prefer home made feed because
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feed is hygienic and good for health.
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Moreover parents
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Moreover, parents
should spend more life with their children, so they did not use mobile phones for a long time. To conclude people should lose weight by doing exercise and with
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they remain fit and healthy.
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Also, they
live a long time.
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