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Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or not agree.

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It is argued that the goals achieved by people are probably based on luck.
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 statement because hard and smart
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 is required to do so.
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 with, fortune does not always play an important role in fulfilling a dream. In order to achieve a task, a person has to put constant efforts required for that. Luck does not involve in completing a task or assignment. Hard
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 always pays off sooner or later depending on our efforts rather than on our fate.
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, a recent study on The Department of Education proved that people who accomplished their goals by good luck rather than working hard on it is only around 15%.
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, hard
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 is not the only thing which needs to be concentrated on. Smart
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 plays a crucial role in accomplishing any kind of dreams. A person needs to understand the requirements that have to be involved when working on a goal, so that he can easily understand it, analyse it and perform on it properly in a short period of time without putting much effort. Take an example of preparing a power point presentation, if a person knows the shortcuts on how to use that software, it can be easily done in a few hours and it completely depends on our task and not on our luck. In conclusion, to achieve a set of goals, the things which are essential are hard and intelligent
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 but not a good fortune.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diligence
  • consistent effort
  • inherent talent
  • honing skills
  • external factors
  • upbringing
  • social connections
  • economic background
  • right place at the right time
  • contributing factor
  • conjunction
  • success
  • achievements
  • endeavors
  • fortune
  • serendipity
  • determinants
  • efficacy
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