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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Other, however, think that change is always a good thing.

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People have different views about, whether
change
 is good for them or bad. While some people would like to spend their lives on doing the same things and avoiding
change
, in my view, people need
change
 in their lives. On the one hand, there are some reasons why people like to do the same things and avoid
change
. Some people might spend their lives on doing the same things in order to become more skilful or they want to learn a job or activity more closely.
In addition
, people would like to do the same things again and again as they really love what they do and they are afraid of finding another job or activity that give them happiness. In spite of the arguments above, I think that doing the same job is tedious and people do not need to worry about
change
.
Firstly
, people should be ready for everything like
change
, because life is not stable all the time.
Secondly
,
change
 may bring people’s life, happiness or bad thing,
however people
Accept comma addition
however, people
 learn from them and become more flexible.
Finally
,
change
 is not worth worrying so people should do whatever they want to do. In conclusion,
although
 people avoid
change
 and doing the same things, I believe that
change
 is beneficial to people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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