Most people accept that the we now live in a globalized world but not everyone agrees that this is beneficial. To what extend is globalization a positive or negative development?
Globalization
is the gift of the 21st century and it has changed the way of living for many individuals. However
, many argue that,
it has caused many problems, than that Remove the comma
apply
of
positive developments, Change preposition
apply
whereas
, many have exactly
opposite view about it. In my view, Internationalization may have some pessimistic outcomes, but Add an article
an exactly
overall
positive developments engulf
the negative criticism.
When the world became connected with each other by Verb problem
outweigh
the
means of technology and development, it became like a global village. Correct article usage
apply
For Instance
, we are able to buy products, technologies, Correct word choice
and gadgats
gadgats
of different countries, but, that was not possible Correct your spelling
gadgets
few
years back, but with the advent of Correct article usage
a few
globalization
, it is possible and many business
are flourishing Change to a plural noun
businesses
due to
this
and they are able to expand their business empire in different countries which leads to creation
of ample of employment opportunities. Add an article
the creation
Thus
, globalization
has led to many benefits for the economy of countries and has many positive developments too.
On the other hand
, every coin has two sides, globalization
also
has negative consequences too. For example
, on one
Correct article usage
the one
hand
companies Add a comma
hand,
are benefitted
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benefit
by
cheap labour to do their work Change preposition
from
of
employees from India and China, on the negative side their own countrymen are facing Change preposition
for
shortage
of employment, which is a major problem in many developed nations like Add an article
a shortage
USA
and Europe. Correct article usage
the USA
Globalization
is also
diminishing the originality of the country due to
increase
in Correct article usage
the increase
migration
level of the people.
Correct article usage
the migration
To conclude
, internationalization does have certain negative points, like, dissatisfaction of their own people, but, it is totally engulf
by the positives, like Change the verb form
is totally engulfed
economy
growing well and the business is Correct article usage
the economy
also
flourishing.Submitted by jay tank on
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