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Is it good for children to start using computers from an early age and spend long hours on them? Discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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Every coin has two sides. To spend an excessive time to sit in front of the computers and other electronic devices by children. There are certain merits to keep using computers and several demerit as well. To start up with advantages, today's era of adolescence are more influenced toward electronic equipment rather than natural things.
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, children will get technical knowledge by using the
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, they would get international news by the use of the internet.
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, the computers are most useful for online
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 and while studying if children would confused on any subject, they can simply Google that problem and get solutions from teachers
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, The Cambridge university did the survey about
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 materials, and It has been proved that 92% of children were preferred online
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 than classroom
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. On the other sides, there are various disadvantages to using computers for a long time.
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, In earlier age children does have sensitive eye, which can be damaged quickly. That means, the
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's screen bright up with deadly blue rays which is brutally harmful for children. Add more, children won't be socially connected with their kith and kins.
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, In long period children will become more obese and might get physical diseases in early age. To sum up, the
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 is huge beneficial for mental growth of children
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but they have to spend limited hours sitting on
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the computer
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, because children should have been adopted social culture as well.
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