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Some people believe that it is wrong to keep animals in zoos, while others think that zoos are both entertaining and ecologically important. Discus both views

#people #animals #zoos #discus
Animals are one of the essential parts of our ecosystem and in
this
 modern era, everyone
have
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has
 their own perspective
for
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of
 how to keep animals. It is asserted by few that animals should be caged but others believe that it is not correct to keep animals in the zoos and take their freedom away. I am going to discuss my viewpoints in the subsequent paragraphs. To commence with,
it
it is
it's
 unethical to keep animals in the
zoo
 as per animal rights because imprisoning them for entertainment takes away their freedom of living in the natural habitat, while in the
zoos
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zoo
zoo's
 animals are kept in an artificial habitat there they are not able to hunt their prey and roam freely.
For instance
, zebra, baboons and many more animals are caught by
zoo
 keepers from like one of the biggest forests in Karnataka and brought up to
zoo
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the zoo
 and caged for public view, thereby violating their right. Apart from
this
, zoological parks are not established for saving
animals but
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animals, but
 for creating income for
zoo
 keepers by trading them in other zoos or even circuses in the return of money, which
further
 enhance their profit making.
On the other hand
, some people argue that animals should be caged. Nowadays, education to students rely more on
theoretical knowledge
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the theoretical knowledge
 on animals, but pupils know very less about them practically. Visiting and viewing animals in the
zoo
 students can gain immense knowledge by observing them closely.
For example
, a survey conducted by an educational board of Punjab revealed that more than 75% of students learn and gain more knowledge when they watch animals practically rather than merely memorizing what is taught in their schools.
Additionally
, zoos help in conserving animals by providing them
safe place
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a safe place
safe places
 to live away from hunters and
also
 provide animals with proper food. To summarize,
although
 zoos helps in saving animals from the hunters as well as are a source of education, yet these are not the perfect place for animals to survive because
they
of them or themselves
their
 unethically cage them as well as use animals for earning money.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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