Government investment in the arts is a waste of money. Governments must invest this money in public services instead. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Today, many people from different countries and races live together. Both the advantages and disadvantages of
this
social situation will be looked at, examples and analysis will be provided below. There are several benefits of a mixture nation that people from various
culture
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cultural
backgrounds.
First
and foremost, people who live in multicultural society could learn from others, which means that they have more opportunities to experience other people’s unique things
such
as
language
,
life style
a manner of living that reflects the person's values and attitudes
lifestyle
and the way of thinking.
For instance
, we will find
that is
much
more easy
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easier
to learn a
second
language
if children live with foreign
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
or classmates
instead
of studying in courses, because they could talk with native speakers to get the core of
this
language
.
In addition
, living with people from diverse states will enable us to become more understanding and tolerant. I mean people won’t be too judged to unfamiliar things as they can access to different customs and beliefs in different cultures easily.
However
, there are
also
some drawbacks may caused by multiracial community.
To begin
with, some people may
loose
fail to keep or to maintain; cease to have, either physically or in an abstract sense
lose
their capabilities of their ethnic like native
language
or traditional customs. The reason is that the international
language
is
English so
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English, so
most of people need to communicate with others in English. Case in point, a lot of young
Asian
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Asians
who have emigrated to western countries can’t use their mother tongue fluently, even don’t know the history of their own country.
Moreover
, If people insist on their own way of doing things and refuse to respect other cultures, there will be conflicts between people. In conclusion, I think the advantages of a multicultural society outweigh its disadvantages.
Although
it does bring some problems, I still believe
such
a society would surely be better for stability and peace in the world.
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