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Advantages and disadvantages of watching TV for children.

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Nowadays the prevalence of watching
television
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 as a means of entertainment is very common. Children are the most common age group with maximum
amount
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 of
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TV audience
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the TV audience
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 there are numerous advantages and disadvantages, I believe that the drawbacks outweigh the advantages for children watching
TV
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. A child can gain knowledge as visualization of complex concepts which aid learning through educational channels. It is proven that
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 method of learning will help retain information for a longer period of
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.
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, children can better their communication skills by watching how people talk to each other on
TV
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. The greatest advantage is served to children with disabilities as they can relate to the world better through
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 sort of entertainment.
On the other hand
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, children that spent a copious
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 of
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 watching
television
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 form an addiction to it,
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 wasting a lot of their
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. It is
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 true that many children do not watch
television
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 for educational purposes, rather they watch cartoons. Most of the kids will take
time
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 out of purposeful activities like hobbies or even school work, just to watch
television
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.
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 type of
sedentary lifestyle
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the sedentary lifestyle
 of the youth leads to obesity, which in turn leads to
comorbidities
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 causing a decline in health. Another health issue is bad posture from long hours of sitting in front of a screen. To summarize, there are generally more drawbacks of watching
TV
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 for children. With the rise in
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amount
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the amount
 of children watching
TV
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, there is a proportional rise of obesity, unhealthy lifestyle and distraction from education. All these factors, makes me believe that children should limit the
amount
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 of
TV
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 they watch in a day to the minimum
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, so that they can have
time
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 for their chores and homework. Excess of
television
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 is not good for the youth.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Educational programs
  • Cultural awareness
  • Attention span
  • Cognitive development
  • Screen time
  • Violence and aggression
  • Health implications
  • Social skills
  • Parent supervision
  • Academic performance
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