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Some people think cars are a better way of transportation around the city, while other prefer cycling. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Opinions of people in choosing what type of transport is better for the journey are differing from each other.Some like using a bike, other betrayed to
car
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the car
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 with, people get fluctuated when the try to choose the best way to go from one point to another.And they are baffled when there are auto and bike to opt.For me
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being delivered by car is more safe and comfortable.
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The first reason
 is its iron covering which doesn't jeopardise us and keep in safe inside.
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, as technologies are improving day by day, opportunities of machine are enriching in the same way.Cars create all possible conveniences inside for all types of weather and convey much faster thanks to tires and strong, modern internal structure.To sum up, it's clear that cars are better, according to some main points which have to be completed for delivering passengers as safe and fast as possible
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, due to the increasing number of new roads and bridges people nowadays became victims of auto incidents and crushes more than ever before.It forces people to use the least dangerous type of transportation and bikes are popular in terms of
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