It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

Some people believe that
punishment
is essential in order to bring up children properly and to teach them the difference between right and wrong behaviours, which I am totally disagree since there are alternative ways to break children bad behaviours. In
this
essay I will explain my reasons and
disscus
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
discusses
some other methods for parents and teachers to break children's bad behaviours. On the one hand, I am completely against
punishment
beacuse
for the reason that; on account of
because
if children experience it
in
Suggestion
at
an early age, they might face many issues in their adulthood.
For instance
, there is a study showing that a high percentage of these children
experienced aggrasive
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experienced, aggressive
experienced aggressive
behaviours, anxiety and
unconfidence
when they grow up.
Therefore
, these adverse effects should be considered and
punishment
, especially physical
punishment
, should be avoided.
On the other hand
, there are other
approches
move towards
approaches
available for teachers and parents that if they use them,
cildren
a young person of either sex
children
will learn good behaviours spontaneously.
For example
, simply explaining them
reasones
a rational motive for a belief or action
reasons
and consequences of a bad behaviour could encourage them to avoid wrong decisions, which is called positive
enforcment
the act of enforcing; ensuring observance of or obedience to
enforcement
in psychology.
Thus
, parents should try
this
alternative ways to
decipline
a branch of knowledge
discipline
their children. In conclusion, there are some people claiming that
punishment
is the only option for children to realize the difference between wrong and right;
however
, I am
definitly
without question and beyond doubt
definitely
disagree, and I would recommend the newer ways, which are
associate
Suggestion
associated
with less consequences.
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